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Earlier this week I caught up with Zombie Tour who filled me in on the details of their latest gory adventure. On their way to headline a concert in Devon the guys got lost.

 A whole load of shouting and several wrong turns later; the boys were stranded in the middle of the countryside with nothing but each other’s company to get them through the trauma. Guitarist Tom Wagstaff wasted no time in updating me on the catalogue of events.

“It was horrible, you would of thought that in this day and age you’d get phone signal anywhere you went. The worst part of the experience was Jack all he does is panic. What kind of rock star worries about what is hiding in the trees?”

 The members of Zombie Tour spent a whole night out in the sticks before a local farmer came across them while on his way to the market. We asked him his version of events, “I never seen nothing like it. Call these lot rock stars? Like a bunch of pansies, they are. Tell you what wouldn't get rock stars like this in my day, they’d have made it into a party, not a girls sleepover.”

 Among all this confusion and freight it turns out Zombie Tour really can make the best out of a bad situation and a song may have been written while they were stranded on their bus. 

Lead singer Jack walker explained his excitement to produce this song, “we came up with some brilliant ideas and somehow we managed to come up with a piece of genius. 

I can’t contain my excitement to produce and work on this song with the team, it will make number 1 if we are able to pull it off, which of course we will.”  So after all everyone is happy. 

The boys from Zombie Tour have an exciting new project to work on and you, the fans who missed out on the concert get free tickets to see Zombie Tour headlining at the O2 arena and an early released copy of the much awaited debut album ‘Rhythm of the undead’.


After reading back over my article and taking into account the the opinions of my target audience I made some alterations to my 1st draft and constructed a new article that appeals better to my target audience.

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EARLIER this week I caught up with Zombie Tour who filled me in on the details of their latest gory adventure. On their way to headline a concert in Devon the guys managed to crash their tour bus.

Guitarist Tom Wagstaff wasted no time in updating me on the catalogue of events…

“We had been playing a gig in London the night before and to be honest we hadn’t been to bed. It is a four hour drive from London to Devon and it was going fine until we hit the back roads. The lanes were so narrow the bus was struggling to fit down them, then a really sharp been came out of nowhere and the bus just didn’t turn in time. It went straight through a wooden gate and crashed into a tree.

None of the band was seriously hurt but the bus driver was knocked out and had blood all on his head. What happened next was horrible, we tried to call for help but none of our phones were working. You would of thought that in this day and age you’d get phone signal anywhere you went but even when we walked for miles we still couldn’t get any.

The worst part of the experience was Jack all he does is panic. What kind of rock star worries about what is hiding in the trees? Then we got lost. It took us six hours, a whole load of shouting and several wrong turns later to find the bus again. And the scary bit was the driver had gone! No joke, he had completely disappeared and Jack just freaked out saying it was like a horror film or something.”

 At this point Jake jumps in; “I’m telling you man, I thought we would never be found. I thought I was going to die out there. We ended up stranded in the middle of the countryside all night with nothing but each other’s company to get us through the trauma.”

The next morning at 7am Zombie Tour were “rescued” by a local farmer who was driving to market in Exeter. We asked him his version of events; “I never seen nothing like it. Call these lot rock stars? Like a bunch of pansies, they are. Tell you what wouldn't get rock stars like this in my day… they’d have made it into a party, not a girls’ sleepover. I found this lot shivering, whining and arguing about what they should do and if they had just walk a mile in the other direction then would have been in Cullompton. Pathetic.”

Among all this confusion and freight it turns out Zombie Tour really can make the best out of a bad situation and a song may have been written while they were stranded on their bus.